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you dealt it
is the one that committed the crime
craftily changed from "you said the rhyme, you did the crime", which, rhyming itself, opened itself up to the selfsame abuse...
It's the maturity level of this place that I lvoe so much...
rhythmically does it?
youre not a poet and you may or may not be aware of this fact.
That scans a bit better, I reckon. And also sounds kind of Shakespearean. I'd like to think that Shakespeare sat there writing Macbeth and making up rhymes about his trouser trumpets.
five stresses to the line -
the ONE(1) who DID(2) first SAY(3) the RHYME(4)
= i think tetrameter.
to pair it up
the ONE who DID first SAY the RHYME
should BE laDEN with GUILT of CRIME
I guess I'm just an ameter when it comes to poetry.