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Stagger-Linn [Edit] [Delete] 11 replies 22:48, 24 August '09

Hiya, can anyone give any tips for writing a script for a short film? The plot is about four ten year olds, who are in their summer holidays, and due to their growing ‘urges’, one of the members crush on a local girl and peer pressure they set upon stealing a porn magazine from a local corner shop.

One of the members, the 'cry baby' of the group, gets caught from an ‘on the beat bobby’ and taken to his parents. The others run away from home to the woods and begin to fight over whether to go back home or not, and who is to hold the magazine due to distrust of the others.

In the end, the parents know where they’re hiding as the ‘cry baby’ member of the group tells them about their den in the woods, and their parents find them and the kids are forced to go home.

I’ve already thought out a soundtrack which has some Harry Nilsson, Le Tigre, The Smiths, El Guincho, Grandmaster Flash, N.W.A. and 5.6.7.8’s. But it’s the dialogue I’m useless at, so any tips on that would be appreciated – bare in mind they have sound like ten year olds, not twenty eight year olds. Also, if I join a film society at university will they allow me to borrow filming equipment?

thanks a lot.

in/be4/howdoifingeragirl

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  • talk to paul hawkins

    username: theguywithnousername

    he'll have lots of advice about scriptwriting

    brusma | 24 Aug '09, 22:50 | X
  • the ending sucks

    sharp_yet_blunt | 24 Aug '09, 22:51 | X
    • Sorry, I will write in a gun battle

      or that the kids live on the streets for the rest of their lives because they can't bare the shame of stealing a porn mag.

      Stagger-Linn @sharp_yet_blunt | 24 Aug '09, 22:52 | X
      • seems anti-climactic

        wheres the tension? Maybe have some sort of mild danger involved in the woods where by the cry baby's initial refusal to rat out on his friends is actually putting them in danger. having the characters be 10 years old means the script cant be overly witty or anything so i would try and show feelings and motives through visuals rather than dialogue.

        sharp_yet_blunt @Stagger-Linn | 24 Aug '09, 23:21 | X
        • or captions

          shrewbie @sharp_yet_blunt | 24 Aug '09, 23:26 | X
  • simpsons did it

    shrewbie | 24 Aug '09, 22:54 | X
  • i don't think you can refer to an episode of Byker Grove as a "short film"

    douchebag | 24 Aug '09, 22:55 | X
  • why would you bring up fingering?

    oh wait... you should write about your experiences in regards fingering. thats all i got, but you know, fingering.

    doodthatkicksarse | 24 Aug '09, 23:06 | X
    • Oh yeah

      he's the fingering guy!

      shrewbie @doodthatkicksarse | 24 Aug '09, 23:08 | X
      • he's always asking for advice, isnt he?

        finger this, film that... put two and two together...

        doodthatkicksarse @shrewbie | 24 Aug '09, 23:12 | X
  • Download Celtx sir

    a great script writing program.

    As for your tale, I'd say make sure the kids swear like troopers. Kids are little bastards and it's about time there was a realistic portrayal of that.

    orsonwellesrabbit | 24 Aug '09, 23:41 | X
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