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Is in this blog: http://teacupvillage.blogspot.com/
I'd love thy feedbacks.
1. You should delete every word up to "Its now six months" [but watch out that you fix the mistake in what would then be the first word] and most of the ones that come after.
2. You should practise describing what music sounds like and how it makes you feel. Really, most of what you've written is a long-winded way of saying "I like it, it's brilliant" and why would I care about that?
Not trying to put you down or anything - I've read a lot worse writing on music blogs. I can imagine you writing a useful review eventually but you'll need a lot of practice.
Baby steps back in. Its contextualisation and it's important. I've won awards for writing before, this is a bit of a mess but that's both intentional and not surprising. I do think I actually describe the music in quite a lot of detail - its not exactly Haydn is it?
You're right though, its not brilliant.
have you heard the Quite Village mix of Woozy With Cider? that version is so dark.
but keep it up and I bet you find your feet and style in no time.
you seen this vid with an annoying drunken fan?
I used to write an awful lot and edit it a lot but I kind of went for raw this time, even I, on re-reading, found it a bit like Bambi on ice - a bit too scatalogica. Thank though.
I have seen that vid - what an arsehole. And I will look for the Woozy with Cider remix too. I love that song.
I like the blog, but I get a slight feeling you're trying too hard.
I feel like I'm reading the work of somebody who wants to impress me with his writing style as much as tell me about the music, and thats maybe slightly amatuerish - I would say, tone down the verbosity for when you really want to make an impact, but otherwise I think its really strong, i especially like the 'singing in the face of a nonplussed takeaway worker' imagery
i mean i can read entire album reviews and come out with no idea what the hell the album sounds like or how good it is. music criticism seems to be more about everything but the music you're talking about, as if that's merely a passable excuse to discuss as much other stuff as you can get away with. meh, with that in mind, does it matter if i've never heard hummingbird by born ruffians? it's as good as music criticism can be, i suppose. ignore me
not saying this is, i havent read it yet.
but maybe its the good stuff thats makes you feel what the music is like and the bad stuff that just warbles about all the issues making the album and what the band mean the guitarists faveourite porridge and if it's good or bad.
spose it just deends on what you expect or want from music criticism.