http://soundcloud.com/whatisthewhat/russian-roulette-in-progress

Audio quality aside, I know there are many things wrong with this song, I just don't know what they are. Is my singing out of tune? Am I trying to do too many things instrumentally? Are the lyrics cheesy, too straightforward, not understandable? Is the structure too complicated? Is the melody dull? All of the above?

Overall, I'm happy about how it turned out, but I've worried about all of these things at some point during the process. A sensible conclusion would be that it's a bit of everything, but your thoughts are far more valuable than mine.

Cheers to anyone who can be arsed to listen and answer.