Too many commas? Not enough analysis/big words? Cringeworthy attempts to be funny?
If you don't mind kindly tell me in a few words whether I should give up on becoming a critic (and back to being a useless stoner) it'd really give me some peace of mind. It's the first review I've written in over a year. Looking back, I was pretty crap. But, perhaps naively, I think this is a bit of an improvement.

http://www.sonicdice.com/2009/07/16/ep-review-last-harbour-saint-luminous-bride/

Cheers.